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The Ark Of Adams: Jack Kane

July 21, 2011

Dr. Timothy Adams’ invention was supposed to save mankind. Indeed, Arcadia, was to be his crowning achievement.

Through life extension technologies and Virtual Reality fueled immersion, a land of plenty has been given birth to; a shelter from the dawning New Ice Age and collapsing globally economic markets. But, the shadowy government agency from which his funding was so generously provided has other plans.

Meet Nikki Allen, Arcadia Citizen 472. When a stranger claims knowledge of the believed mythical Genesis Code Exploit, she is drawn into a deadly game of cat and mouse, her identity stolen, a fugitive amidst the hacker underground.

But, when tragedy comes to strike the area of Limmerick, an uneasy peace will threaten to boil over and a fight will be waged for the ultimate control of an imperfect world that will never be the same.

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Oh dear.

I always do my best to try to find something positive to say about the books I review here but in this case it is just not possible for me to do so. The Ark Of Adams contains punctuation errors, problems with grammar, overwriting, contradictions, exposition and some unfortunate juxtapositions that would have been funny if they had been intentional.

This book needs more than editing and copyediting; it needs rewriting from beginning to end; but until its author develops a much better understanding of language, grammar and pace he is unlikely to be able to improve this book sufficiently to make that task a worthwhile endeavour.

I don’t like to be so negative about anyone’s work; I appreciate the effort and commitment that goes into writing a book; but this book is so deeply and variously flawed that in this case I have no option. I offer my apologies to Mr. Kane and hope that his work improves significantly over the coming years. I  read just two pages of this book’s three hundred and fifty nine, despite overlooking several errors.

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  1. July 21, 2011 at 10:36 am

    That’s a real shame. From the blurb, It seems as though there could be a great story buried in there.

  2. DOT
    July 21, 2011 at 10:59 am

    I am seriously tempted to publish the 5th edit of my book, fully knowing all its present weaknesses, just for you to throw a foam custard pie in my face. (And no, I do not have a Chinese wife:)

  3. jfishler08
    July 21, 2011 at 9:39 pm

    Have been seriously considering self-publishing; however…am terrified of earning some or any of those tags. Am having mss critiqued. Again.
    A lot goes into writing a book, stands to reason it should be given every chance…
    Self-publishing is…well, it’s just too tempting.
    Nothing like a little dose of reality. You scare me silly, but at same time, am grateful…

  4. July 22, 2011 at 4:07 pm

    So, terrible, but at least it’s long. Hmmm… Reminds me of the Woody Allen joke I used in my book: Two women having lunch together: One says, “the food here is terrible.” The other says, “yes, and so little of it.”

  5. July 25, 2011 at 6:03 pm

    I agree, jfishler08. Self-publishing feels like an easy out to me sometimes. (I’m not knocking those who have done it right.) There are days that the waiting and the agonizing over details grows too much, and it’s so tempting to format the manuscript for Kindle, editing be damned.

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