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Few Are Chosen: M T McGuire

April 21, 2011

Few are Chosen

The Pan of Hamgee isn’t paranoid. There must be some people in K’Barth who aren’t out to get him; it’s just that, right now, he’s not sure where they are. His family are dead, his existence is treason and he does the only thing he can to survive — getaway driving.

As if being on the run isn’t bad enough, when he finds a magic thimble and decides to keep it, he unwittingly sets himself on a collision course with Lord Vernon, K’Barth’s despot ruler.

Unwillingly, The Pan is forced to make choices and stand up for his beliefs — beliefs he never knew he had until they were challenged. But, faced with a stark moral dilemma will his new found integrity stick? Can he stop running?

Reader comments

“Funny and completely original, I loved it.” Joe, aged 13

“I am your number one fan.” Emily, aged 30 something

Many of the books I’ve reviewed here could have done with a good hard edit, and Few are Chosen is no exception. Where it differs from most of those other books however is that (based on the pages I read) it is most in need of a copy edit rather than a full-blown structural one. I found numerous punctuation problems, a couple of tautologies, some odd sentence constructions and some pretty naff typesetting choices which made the text much harder to read than it should have been.

However, I also found an engaging main character (even though his humour was a little forced at times), a fast-paced opening and a better-than-usual setup. If the author were to improve on the few weaknesses I found, reduce his reliance on exposition, and cut back on his use of adjectives and dialogue tags his book would be significantly improved.

I read four pages out of this book’s two hundred and forty-five, but despite that low page-count I might well return to it again.

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  1. April 21, 2011 at 12:40 pm

    You mean the author needs the kind of copy editor who’d cunningly spot things like the fact that Mary is a woman’s name 🙂 Sorry, couldn’t resist that.

  2. April 21, 2011 at 4:50 pm

    I could go off you, Mr H.

    (In my defense I didn’t know the author was called Mary, as she uses her initials on the cover. And yes, I know how feeble an excuse that is.)

  3. April 26, 2011 at 7:32 am

    That’s why I’ve hired a copyeditor/proofreader for my indie-publications. Why make it easy for a reader to put the book down when it’s such an easy fix?

  4. May 14, 2011 at 3:32 pm

    @Alex. That’s why I did, too. And it cost me a lot of money.

    Bum.

    When it comes to Grammar, I confess to a complete loss of confidence. I’ve discovered that pretty much everything I was taught in school is now considered to be outmoded or just plain wrong. I’ve bought a text book because most of the information given on the internet is contradictory. Alas, words don’t cut the mustard with my child-care addled brain the way a proper face to face lesson does. Hence the singular absence of book 2.

    When the young man starts school in September, I can, too. In the meantime, I’m hoping I’ve found a professional proof reader who’ll go through it again in the next month or so. At least, then, I can release a tidier second edition.

    Food for thought. Much appreciated. Thanks for reading.

    Cheers

    MTM

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